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Chicago Streets

Hi. Here's the full poem of my first entry. Hope you have time to read it despite so many entries, and can you also spare some time to give it a feedback? I would really appreciate it. Thanks in advance..

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  • jcalzado25
    jcalzado25
    • 3 yıl önce

    Hi! Thank you very much for your feedback. I guess I could still try to make a new one since there's still plenty of time. Is it ok? And I have a question, for the named streets do you want their corresponding numbers included or you're ok with just their names? I'd really appreciate your response. Thank you in advance..!

    • 3 yıl önce
  • chicodes101
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    • 3 yıl önce

    Hi there--thanks for the feedback. I can tell you put care and time into creating the stanzas, which is very impressive! my main critique is that the poem's rhymes are a stretch and that there are way too many syllables in many of the lines. Also--since this poem is about making the streets and numbers memorable, I would prefer something that is more "fun"--this is very literally just someone describing the streets one by one. But thank you for your entry!

    • 3 yıl önce