Business Descriptions

Durum: Closed
Ödül: $65
Alınan Girdiler: 9
Kazanan: GavinParish

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I need 3 descriptions of my business written for general use in marketing and web sites like our own, Facebook and Google Pus. These should be customer centric and designed with the customers point of view in mind. I would like a longer one and a couple shorter versions of about a paragraph and about 2-3 paragraphs. These will be used on web pages and in marketing materials we produce in house or, if this works well, on Freelancer. This is my first posting so If more information is needed please feel free to ask. I have included a document with our current description and some information about us but, frankly, I am a technician, NOT a writer and after over 20 years in business I am done doing it myself :-)

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“We were thrilled with Gavins winning entry in our writing contest. It was top notch!”

mbrixius, United States.

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- 11 yıl önce
Thank you all for your entries. I have removed older entries and we will be picking a winner tomorrow after our morning meetings
- 11 yıl önce
ryanjsims
- 12 yıl önce
1 like to LCarabajal.
- 12 yıl önce
ryanjsims
- 12 yıl önce
We all have bad days. Hope your day gets better.
- 12 yıl önce
Yarışma Sahibi
- 12 yıl önce
God what a disaster of a day, I am extending this for 3 days so that you all get the feedback you deserve.
- 12 yıl önce
Yarışma Sahibi
- 12 yıl önce
An emergency has come up at the office, I WILL finish these feedbacks today. Because I was slow in getting the feedback in (Which I now realize is more important that the initial description) I will do a 3 day extension if anyone who has already made a submission wants me to.
- 12 yıl önce
Yarışma Sahibi
- 12 yıl önce
I am sorry for the slow feedback. I wanted some feedback from others but they have been too busy. I will drop specific feedback on each piece in the next couple hours but some general feedback that applies to many of them is that they are what I call we we we descriptions that would be ok if they were targeting employees but are not good for customers. People care about how they are helped, not what we have, do or give. For instance if I write "We will have one of our technicians call our customer within an hour of receiving their support request" the information is in terms of US, not them and that makes for poor marketing. It is FAR better to say something like "You will be contacted by your service technician within an hour of placing a support request" which is all about them.

Thanks so much for all the great submissions, I will get to specific feedback right away and promise faster feedback in the future.
- 12 yıl önce
mynk16
- 12 yıl önce
Hi mbrixius,

I understand your requirements very well and will submit an entry very soon.

- Mayank
- 12 yıl önce
1. mynk16
  - 12 yıl önce
  #10 it is. Waiting for your valuable feedback.& ratings.
  - 12 yıl önce
anasnasheed
- 12 yıl önce
Hi,
I just submitted my description of your company. Hope you like it.
- 12 yıl önce
chriskingsley
- 12 yıl önce
Hi, you must post it as a project as contests are rarely used for writing projects. :-)
- 12 yıl önce
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1. TheGuyver2040
  - 12 yıl önce
  Just so everyone is aware, it seems that users like "Chris Kingsley," are lobbying for writing contests to be canceled in favor of writing projects. In doing so, they hope to leverage an advantage over other users, as they have an established reputation on this site (i.e., some users have been here for 10+ years). Their reputation may not necessarily speak towards their level of skill, however, as many elect to outsource their work to native English speakers. So, there's in fact a method behind the madness. Contest entries from some groups of users are noticeably scarce, as payment is earned through skill rather than name. What results are spam entries - submitted in the hopes of irritating contest holders enough to goad them into project posting.
  - 12 yıl önce
2. mynk16
  - 12 yıl önce
  @mbrixius
  There is no harm posting this as a contest. It is much better cause you will get entries with different writing styles and based on your requirements you can award the best entry.
  - 12 yıl önce
Yarışma Sahibi
- 12 yıl önce
I will rate applicants soon, we are having freezing rain and the power keeps going out (For hours at a time). The power line in front of the house is under extreme strain so I just logged in fast to check but don't want to keep the PC on.
- 12 yıl önce
1. LCarabajal
  - 12 yıl önce
  No stress, contest doesn't end for six days. Stay safe!
  - 12 yıl önce
ryanjsims
- 12 yıl önce
Please rate applicants.
Thank You
- 12 yıl önce
ryanjsims
- 12 yıl önce
i Love the writing contests, especially Copy. I wish there was more. Good luck everyone.
- 12 yıl önce
nicholaszube
- 12 yıl önce
Submission entered! Don't hesitate to let me know if you need anything else to further your business, and I hope you like what you see. Best of luck with your contest!
- 12 yıl önce