Editing/Proofing/Improvement suggestions on a 600 word sales letter/document

Attached is letter inviting local residents to join our gym/fitness coaching program. It is going as a mailout to homes in our area.

I wrote it myself, but have no formal experience in doing such things. I'd like a professional to take a look at it and perhaps improve its readability, flow, grammar all that editorial type stuff.


Beceriler: Metin Yazarlığı, Düzenleme, Düzeltme/Tashih

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( 7 değerlendirme ) Hawthorn, Australia

Proje NO: #4422055



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