Build a animated product demo video

please find attached the script for the product demo video needed for our mobile application .It helps to track the location and speed violations done by buses, school buses in particular. our target market is the school Administration and parents of children going to school by bus .please give your inputs on any changes needed in the script and the type of animation video which will suit our product. We want to give the message of safety and smartness to the potential users of our product. The length of the video should be 30 seconds