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greenraven91
Astral plane
So, this is my creative piece. It has some interesting ideas and plot twists. I hope to get your feedback on this subject because i enjoyed donig this. It has some room for improvement (more words, of course) and fix any possible errors
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Yarışma Sahibi - 9 yıl önce
Hello, and thanks for the entry! Yes, there are a few errors in punctuation. Also, the story should be written all in the same tense. Lastly, a lot of the characters are very direct. Subtlety is appreciated! :)
- 9 yıl önce
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greenraven91
- 9 yıl önce
thanks for future hints, it was doing this
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greenraven91
- 9 yıl önce
fun*
- 9 yıl önce
